Monday, March 02, 2009

Verse, Universe

A verse
in a universe.

A universe
in a verse.

Perverse,
parts of universe.

Reverse the perverse
in part by verse.

Diverse verse,
Universe diverse.

Verse versus universe;
Universe versus verse:

Tension.
Spark.
Flame.

Flame down,
Flame in,
Flame out.

Reborn--
forlorn
no more.

The poem told.
The telling done.

The verses fixed.
The world unjinxed.

5 Comments:

Blogger Sam said...

Dr. Seuss would be proud.

11:44 AM  
Blogger Doug Groothuis said...

Dr. Seuss? Is that an insult? Does playing with rhyme mean you are infantile?

1:04 AM  
Blogger Heath Countryman said...

Woah, woah, woah!

Dr. Suess was not infantile! That man could spin a rhyme and tell a story with force.

Just because he put pictures with it for the kids does not mean his stories are less forceful.

I mean, common, Green Eggs and Ham is a classic... right up there with Huck Finn in American literature.

Ok... maybe that is a stretch... but its still one of my favorites!

9:56 PM  
Blogger Christopher said...

Mr. Groothius,

I appreciate your poem, its reflective nature, and its obvious thoughtfulness.

Thank you for daring to be vulnerable.

And, by the way, Dr. Seuss has nothing on you. I mean that.

3:19 PM  
Blogger Claudia said...

It's very well done. I like the rhythm. When I recite it, it reminds me of Verlaine(see:Chanson D'Automne.) The thought is slowly, beautifully unfolding. Not one word missing. Not one word too much. It's superb when we arrive at:

Reborn--
forlorn
no more.

The ending is great because it's final. The work has been done. The goal has been reached:

The verses fixed.
The world unjinxed.

Et voilĂ ! Very enjoyable to read. Thank you. Probably enjoyable to write?

10:32 PM  

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